Monday, July 9, 2007

Edison "Community" v1

1 comment:

Unknown said...

Looks good. Here are the text suggestions:

Title:
Building School Community

Subtitles:
Faculty Cohesion
Student-Teacher Connections (transition at hallway shot)
Dynamic Instruction (transition at "the biggest problem....")

Do you think this one could be shorter/tighter? I think the poetry website demo might go on too long.

Also, the end felt a little like it just drifted away...not sure what to do about that since I do like the point she makes, but it's not dynamically made...too bad we don't have any exterior arrival shots! Other ideas?

Thanks!